Friday, November 5, 2010
Cleaned up Boards for the "the Premiere". I'm averaging about 2 pages a day on the clean-up end. I'm pretty happy with this set and the story, as well. For all of you from NE Ohio, cue the Big Chuck and L'il John laughter at the end of scene...or maybe it's an Axe body wash commercial concept...
Here's the Feedback from Sergio Paez that I'll be implementing in these before the final portfolio and also things I'll be thinking about while I'm working on a new action sequence...
"great addition here Lincoln,
this is a very exciting and dynamic sequence. There are a few technical issues I want to point out.first the eye line. A good rule of thumb is to always have your characters, looking as close to the camera as possible, but not looking directly at it. So for example when the agent is falling from the sky, and she is looking down at the birds, have her look almost at the camera to engage the audience more.
There are some screen direction issues which don’t make the sequence flow as well as it could.when the agent is falling, she is falling from left to right, but she breaks into the theater premiere from right to left. Rules are made to be broken, but in this case I don’t think it helps the sequence to change screen direction.
you may want to check your framing as well, as I think some of your close-up shots are too tight.otherwise this is a really well drawn and exciting entrance. keep it coming"